College Admissions Essays – The Value of Good Commentary

College Admissions Essays – The Value of Good Commentary

2017-09-04T18:55:36+00:00 August 30th, 2017|College Admissions, The College Admissions Essay|0 Comments

Welcome to the first post in our new College Admissions Essay series! In this series, we share tips and tricks for writing an impactful college admissions essay!

One of the most enjoyable aspects of being a college counselor is helping students write college admissions essays.

Writing a college admissions essay is challenging. Nearly all students need guidance, whether in choosing a topic, becoming comfortable with self expression, telling a compelling story, learning how to expand ideas to create more meaning, refining tone and writing style, or proofreading.

No matter how much help a student needs, college counselors (and well meaning family members!) must remember and respect that the student must be the primary driver of the substance and execution of the essay. The college counselor’s job is to help students by brainstorming topics, focusing their ideas, teaching correct tone, style, and grammar, offering examples of strong writing, and suggesting areas for improvement.

We receive college admissions essays at various stages of development. Each stage requires a different approach to editing. Below are some examples of revisions we provided to a student applying to graduate school. The student provided a fully developed draft and requested our feedback. Rather than perform surgery on each sentence, we read the essay and provided comments and suggestions for each paragraph. This places an expectation on the student to reflect on the comments and incorporate them into the next draft without any additional hand-holding.

This essay explained how an experience at the World Baseball Classic impacted this student’s desire to pursue sports journalism in graduate school…

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This is the level of detail and the type of commentary you can expect from Academic Impact college counselors who edit college admissions essays. This particular student was receptive to our commentary and worked diligently to improve her essay. As she continued to produce drafts, we continued to assist her by suggesting alternative words or phrases and improving grammar. At all times, the student maintained control of the substance and the writing itself.

We love working with students to write a personal narrative that will impress admissions officers and help their chances of getting into the college they want to go to.

Contact us at info@academicimpact.net or (916) 905-2466 if your student is looking for help on college admissions essays.

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